tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10417049.post110732303251762422..comments2023-11-02T10:08:15.791-04:00Comments on Listening Journal: Schubert, Die Schöne Müllerin, #5 Am FeierabendScotthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01286095156825716887noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10417049.post-1107353319053356272005-02-02T09:08:00.000-05:002005-02-02T09:08:00.000-05:00"intensity," not "intenseness." The ideas are all..."intensity," not "intenseness." The ideas are all good, but the writing is somewhat clunky. There are some mixed tenses, missing commas, and unclear pronouns. Whenever you use the word "it," make sure the reference is quite clear. There is some confusion about sections and motives. I think you are combining both ideas under the label "Section."Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01286095156825716887noreply@blogger.com